Thursday, August 28, 2014

Problem Solution Writing Common Mistakes



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[A feedback sheet I used with students writing problem and solution essays.  It was based on the common mistakes my students were making.  I included some information from the disadvantages and advantages feedback sheet because I thought it was also relevant to this class.  The Linking Words and Phrases section is borrowed from a colleague.]

Problem Solution Writing Common Mistakes

Phrase mistakes

On the other hand


By the way


Nowadays


Especially


Grammar Mistakes


It has—there are


easy—easier


cause--occur


make us easy


make us difficult to live


wrong modal verb


effect/ affect


Structure Mistakes


weak conclusions


less than 3 paragraphs of solutions


Two different topics in the same paragraph


Solutions unrelated to main problem (e.g. talking about solutions to global warming in an essay on traffic jams, or in an essay on deforestation.)



Linking Words and Phrases


To introduce points:

·         One advantage/disadvantage of
·         A further advantage/disadvantage is
·         One point of view in favor of/or against
·         It can be argued that

To list points:

·         In the first place,
·         First of all,
·         To start with,
·         Firstly,/Secondly,/Thirdly,
·         Finally,

To add more points to the same topic:

·         What is more,
·         Also,
·         Furthermore,
·         In addition to this/that,

To make contrasting points:

·         On the other hand,
·         Although
·         However,
·         In spite of this/that,
·         Nevertheless,
·         Despite this/that,
·         Even though              

To introduce examples:


·         For example,
·         For instance,
·         In particular,

To conclude:

·         To sum up,
·         All in all,
·         In conclusion,
·         All things considered,
·         As was previously stated,



Additional advice:

Remember that phrases used to make contrasting points (like “On the other hand”) are good to use at the beginning of a contrasting paragraph.  You shouldn’t use it in the middle of a paragraph.

This is correct:

            The Internet is useful for finding new information.
            On the other hand, the Internet can also waste a lot of time.

This is incorrect:

            The Internet is useful for finding new information.   On the other hand, the internet is also useful for keeping in touch with friends and family.

            Also remember that you can use “but” or “although” in a contrasting sentence, but don’t use both in the same sentence.

|These are correct sentences.

            Although I like pizza, I don’t like hamburgers.
            I like pizza but I don’t like hamburgers.

This is an incorrect sentence:

            Although I like pizza, but I don’t like hamburgers.


Below is the correct example of how paragraphs should be written.

The food of Cambodia includes tropical fruits, rice, noodles  and various soups. Cambodians like to eat a rice noodle soup called 'kah-tieu' in the morning. Cambodians are famous for a type of 'kah-tieu' called 'kah-tieu Phnom Penh' which has shrimp, beef balls, fried garlic, pork broth and chicken. Cambodians also eat a red curry noodle soup with rice vermiclle noodles. Curry is also eaten with rice or French bread in Cambodia. Cambodian food is similar to Chinese, Vietnamese  and Thai food.
Cambodia also has a mystical tattoo called a yantra tattoo that is popular with soldiers. A yantra tattoo has ancient Khmer and Pali(An ancient Indian language) writing. A yantra tattoo is usually done by a religious person or monk. The tattoo artist guarantees that the person cannot receive any physical harm as long as they follow certain conditions. A person is suppose to not talk to anyone for three days and three nights. Another alternative is to follow the five Buddhist percepts. Movie star actress Angelina Jolie is known to have a yantra tattoo.

The example below is incorrect.

The food of Cambodia includes tropical fruits, rice, noodles  and various soups. Cambodians like to eat a rice noodle soup called 'kah-tieu' in the morning. Cambodians are famous for a type of 'kah-tieu' called 'kah-tieu Phnom Penh' which has shrimp, beef balls, fried garlic, pork broth and chicken. Cambodians also eat a red curry noodle soup with rice vermiclle noodles. Curry is also eaten with rice or French bread in Cambodia. Cambodian food is similar to Chinese, Vietnamese  and Thai food.
Cambodia also has a mystical tattoo called a yantra tattoo that is popular with soldiers. A yantra tattoo has ancient Khmer and Pali(An ancient Indian language) writing. A yantra tattoo is usually done by a religious person or monk. The tattoo artist guarantees that the person cannot receive any physical harm as long as they follow certain conditions. A person is suppose to not talk to anyone for three days and three nights. Another alternative is to follow the five Buddhist percepts. Movie star actress Angelina Jolie is known to have a yantra tattoo.






Introduction:
Work with a partner.  What mistakes can you find in the following essay:

Nowaday the Internet is becoming more and more popular all the time.  Many people use the internet everyday now.  However, using the Internet has many advantages and disadvantages.

There many advantages for using the Internet.   One advantage is that you can find information very easily using the Internet.   For example, you can use the Internet to find a lot of information.  On the other hand, the Internet is very useful for studying, and finding information.

There also many disadvantages to using the Internet  and although you can find lots of useful information, but it can also be a waste of time and especially  many people use the Internet too much these days, and will ruin their eyesight.  If we use the Internet too much, it will be bad for your eyesight.

In fact although there are many advantages and disadvantages to using the Internet, but I think the Internet has more advantages than disadvantages.  Using the Internet is very useful for us.


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